Calisthenics 1 Week 9

This time with this weeks calisthenics, i decided to rewrite another one and improve on it some more. here are the two originals:

* Uncle! the stars look like cereal, and the moon, a marshmallow
*The moon riding rivers, while the stars remain dominant over the blankets of time (sounds a tad clichish'  but i'm wondering where).
*The moon's half past 12 , stars shining like limelight, forcing the corners of the room to move back... (I'm sure theres a better way to describe the sky, but I want to liken it to a massive room.)

*Uncle, the stars are crashing into each other, painting the sky with streams of milk while the moon is waiting to split the sky with the sun.
*The moon surfing the sky and the stars are cheering him on light years away.
*Dipping below the medium, stars are lime seeds, pushing the corners of the galaxy back.

heres mine:

Daniel! if you look past this canary yellow shirt, you'll see that the stars are melting over the moon, pushing it further into the ground.
 The moon's gliding, slowly past his fans, into his day.
Sailing into the equator, the galaxy struggling to fight back against stars.